Oct 10 2011

A crappy love poem

Published by at 7:10 pm under Uncategorized

Woke up, didn’t see the sun shining bright   

My skin so cold, your touch’s what I’m missing 

Clouds gather around like a storm tonight  

Do you feel that? My heart’s reminiscing  

Since the angels took you away from me

Time’s been frozen in the dead of winter

I try to break through from beneath that sea

But the waves swallow me and I whimper

The dark blue sea washed me up to the shore

To have you back would be my only wish

Thinking of you my tears begin to pour

Many more things we had to accomplish

Now that you are gone it’s all but a dream

You are above smiling down like a sunbeam

 

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2 Responses to “A crappy love poem”

  1.   jenny abeleson 11 Oct 2011 at 7:14 pm

    Crappy? Come on–give yourself some credit! I’m resisting the temptation to enumerate everything you did right in this poem, because I want for you to take a good look and come up with that list yourself. I actually love the title, “Crappy Love Poem,” but then you go ahead a write a serious one instead of a parody or a spoof. *Here’s* a crappy love poem by Shakespeare:

    My mistress’ eyes are nothing like the sun;
    Coral is far more red than her lips’ red;
    If snow be white, why then her breasts are dun;
    If hairs be wires, black wires grow on her head.
    I have seen roses damasked, red and white,
    But no such roses see I in her cheeks;
    And in some perfumes is there more delight
    Than in the breath that from my mistress reeks.
    I love to hear her speak, yet well I know
    That music hath a far more pleasing sound;
    I grant I never saw a goddess go;
    My mistress when she walks treads on the ground.
    And yet, by heaven, I think my love as rare
    As any she belied with false compare.

    Not exactly a glowing report of his lady-love! He’s spoofing the love-poem genre…

    Anyway, Margarita–there’s some good material in this. please print it and bring it to class tomorrow.

  2.   michelleon 11 Oct 2011 at 11:01 pm

    I love your poem! Crappy, think about that again, this is actually a really great poem. I really enjoying reading love poems, as a matter fact all of my poems are related to love,a few deals with pain and death. I am looking forward to read the rest of your poems. Good Job 🙂

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